The following two pia charts show the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in1985 and in 1995.

The following two pia charts show the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in1985 and in 1995.
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The charts illustrate the favourite
activities
in leisure
times
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time
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of European individuals by comparing the times in 1985 and 1995.
Overall
, Those are various
activities
that people
did
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in their free time. In 1985, the kind of leisure
activities
reaching
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reached
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five actions
where as
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whereas
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in 1995, it has
increase
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to
be
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six
activites
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activities
. In detail, watching TV was the highest popular
activities
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in both years,
while
in 1985 at 32%
however
in 1995 it declined to 30%. Following
to
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second place, the number of
having
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conversation
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with friends in 1985 was 21%,
whereas
in 1995 was
grown
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to 27%.
Moreover
, eating out decreased dramatically from 23% in 1985 to 8% in 1995.
Furthermore
, there
are
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new
activities
in 1995,
it
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called playing computer games which
reaching at
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reached
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27%,
this
hobby was in second place that people
are
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interested.
While
in 1985 eating out got 23% but in 1995 it was fallen to 8%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words activities with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Leisure activities
  • Survey results
  • Popularity
  • European adults
  • Shift
  • Passive entertainment
  • Outdoor activities
  • Health consciousness
  • Lifestyle
  • Technological advancements
  • Cultural experiences
  • Personal enrichment
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