what do you think are the advntages and disadvantages of nuying clothes online?
It is known that we live in technology times and it makes pair of jeans online for his special day but the jeans came after 3 days and my friend sent them back again when he tried the jeans and he did not like them.
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On the one hand, buying clothes
online is so fun and cheaper than real shopping. One advantage of online shopping is we can change if you do not like your product. Another advantage is do not need to spend our time
shopping. As every body
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and does not want to go to real stores. He chose the online system because he can find there a Correct your spelling
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lot
of types clothes
and as he says they are so economical.
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On the other hand
, buying online clothes
has some disadvantages which are first,
about quality ( there are
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is
time
and we can not understand till cargo gives us the product) second,
there are have face online sites on the internet and we can lose our money if we use the sites. third,
online shopping needs time
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To sum up
, online shopping has a lot
of advantages but does not every things
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because clothes
are personality, it is not general. in my opinion, we will buy our clothes
online if we can try them online. İmagane, you have a photo on the online site and you can put every clothes
in your photo and you can see and understand it
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that is
a big advantage. I would buy all my clothes
if the technology had online shopping.Submitted by ares.grup on
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