Some people think that excessive use of mobile phones and computers badly affects teenagers’ writing and reading skills. Do you agree or disagree with the statement? Give your opinion.

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people suggest that more usage of Electronic gadgets
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, laptops or
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negative
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a negative
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effect on
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life
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, which is
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their study skills. I'd consider my opinion partially with
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statement. First of all, Phones and
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impact on human lives no matter what age. I think
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is much easier with
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of phones.
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, it's much easier to visit new places through Google
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on phones. We can reach
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any destination at any
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,
computers
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playing
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role in today's era. I'd like to consider that we can
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carry out work
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with us all the
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with the help of
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, the
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of electronic
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equipment
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are
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also
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giving
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hard
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time
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to the parents of teenagers.
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this
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big complexion, kids do not pay attention to their reading, writing and listening skills which is
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affecting their study
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.
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,
Childerns
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children
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not like to spend
time
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on social and physical activities
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excessive use of mobiles and laptops.
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, Parents can only improve their
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skills by having control
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stuff
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that they watch on these gadgets. They can guide them to take
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good advantage of
phone
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phones
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and
computers
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such
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as by teaching them how to save documents, how to make
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presentations
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through visual aids,
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how to do exercise at home.
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task response
Your introduction provides an unclear stance on the topic, and it's crucial to have a thesis that clearly states your position. Your body paragraphs should also connect back to this thesis more clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Transitions between ideas need more fluency. Make sure each paragraph has a clear central idea and that they use cohesive devices to guide the reader smoothly from one idea to the next.
lexical resource
Be vigilant of repetitive phrases and word choices. A wider range of vocabulary would strengthen the quality of the essay, as well as precise language to express your ideas effectively.
grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structure and punctuation. Some sentences may run on or lack clarity. Aim for a mix of simple, compound, and complex sentences to showcase grammatical range.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • excessive use
  • impact
  • dependence
  • reduced attention span
  • engage
  • longer reading tasks
  • informality
  • digital communication
  • erode
  • formal writing
  • spelling skills
  • counterargument
  • enhances
  • access to vast resources
  • interactive learning tools
  • balanced approach
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