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Some people believe that educational establishments should multiply the exams which learners take, while others think this is just a waste of time and strength. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #establishments #exams #learners #waste #time #strength
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Considered by some people,
education
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 institutions should increase the
number
 of
the
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apply
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tests
 for
students
.
Whereas
 others believe it is only wasting energy and time.
This
 essay will discuss both views. On the one hand, regular
exams
 actually help learners to recall what they have learned.
According to
 some experts in learning science, regular
tests
 could help
students
 to memorize materials and understand better.
For instance
, learning a new language is one of the hardest
skill
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skills
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 to acquire for
students
. To help
students
 learn
second
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a second
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 language, teachers usually do daily
quiz
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quizzes
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 and schedule biweekly
exams
.
This
 method has helped
students
 to recall what they have learnt and use the new vocabulary and grammar.
Therefore
,
students
 can have more benefit if
tests
conducted
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are conducted
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 regularly.
However
,
number
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a number
the number
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 of
exams
 taken in
period
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a period
the period
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 of time should be considered. With many subjects to learn,
exceeded
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number
 of
exams
 can be stressful for
students
. Some
of
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educational institutions have no specific regulation of how many
exams
 and quizzes
taken
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are taken
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 on one subject.
For example
,
students
 can have more than 10
exams
 in a week. Rather than beneficial for
students
, the
exams
 become
burden
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a burden
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 since the
students
 might not prepare for the
exams
 and produce bad results.
Therefore
,
number
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a number
the number
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 of
tests
 taken
need
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needs
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 to be reviewed as it is important for
students
' capacity. In conclusion, regular
exams
 can help
student
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students
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 to have better
undestanding
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understanding
.
However
,
education
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educational
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 institutions need to balance the
number
 of
the
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apply
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exams
 and timing. Multiplying the
exams
 without proper planning could impact
students
' performance and produce bad results.
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Task Achievement
Be sure to directly address the task in your introduction by clearly stating your viewpoint, as well as discussing both views. Your introduction was slightly generic, and adding a sentence about your own perspective would have strengthened it.
Coherence & Cohesion
Try to link your ideas more cohesively by using a wider range of conjunctions and transitional phrases. While you've structured your essay logically, enhancing your transitions between paragraphs and ideas would make your argument flow more smoothly.
Task Achievement
For a stronger task achievement, ensure your conclusion succinctly summarizes the discussed views and clearly restates your own opinion, providing a strong closure to your discussion. Your conclusion could benefit from a more decisive stance.
Coherence & Cohesion
Incorporate more varied and complex sentence structures to improve coherence. While your essay has a clear logical flow, utilizing complex grammatical constructions can help articulate your points more effectively.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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