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You recently took a trip with a taxi company. The driver behaved in an unacceptable way and you had a lot of problems. You complained to the company but no-one has replied to your complaint. Say why you writing and how you feel Explain what happened Tell them what you would like them to do

#trip #taxi #company #driver #complaint
Dear Sir or Madam, The reason why l am addressing you is that l want to inform
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about
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that
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 the
driver
 behaved in an unacceptable way and
also
 l had a lot of problems. I want to give me
other
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driver
 and a new, modern
car
. I wrote to you about
this
 very bad situation 2 days ago.
However
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 you do not
answers
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of
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apply
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my questions and you don't help
to
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me regarding
this
 condition. I am very unpleasant
from
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with
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this
 taxi company. I want to explain
about
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what happened.
Firstly
, the
driver
 behaved in an unacceptable way and
also
car
has
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does
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 not heating systems, horn,
and
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or
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 other necessary devices. Unfortunately, now
season
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the season
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 is winter very cold but your taxi has
not
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no
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 heating
systems
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system
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. I would like to new
car
 and
sociable
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a sociable
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 person.
Beside
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 that,
thin
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the layers of windows
car
 and not quality. I want to
thicker
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thicken
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 the layers of windows
car
. I hope you will understand
this
 problem and will give a
help
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 hand to
this
car
 and
driver
 issue in the taxi. Thank you for your attention. Yours faithfully, Bakhriddinova Sitora
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logical structure
A clear introduction, body, and conclusion should be present. Introduce the problem, detail the issue, and state your desired outcome in separate paragraphs to improve structure.
single idea per paragraph
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea or aspect of your complaint to enhance clarity and organization.
suitable writing tone
Adopt a more formal tone, avoiding informal expressions like 'l am addressing you' or 'I want to give me.' Instead, use formal requests such as 'I would like to request...'.
General
Double-check for spelling and grammar. Phrases like 'has not heating systems' should be revised to 'does not have a heating system.' Using correct language will increase the professionalism of your letter.
General
Be specific about your complaint and desired outcome. Instead of saying 'I want to thicker the layers of windows car,' clearly state 'I request that the vehicle provided should have adequately insulated windows for passenger comfort.' This will make your concerns and requests more understandable.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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