Exposure to international media such as films, TV and megazines has significant impact on local culture. What do you think has been the impact? Do you think its advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Media
content has increased exponentially in
last
Correct article usage
the last
show examples
few years, because of
growing
Add an article
a growing
the growing
show examples
number of video editing tools and
platform
Fix the agreement mistake
platforms
show examples
which not only provide simple features like uploading to creators but
also
give free access to viewers to watch
these
Correct determiner usage
this
show examples
content. The rising trend of
contents
Fix the agreement mistake
content
show examples
have
Change the verb form
has
show examples
brought new ideas and cultures into people's
mind
Fix the agreement mistake
minds
show examples
. These trends have pros like free education,
informative
Correct word choice
and informative
show examples
videos
related to a topic but
also
cons like hate
speechs
Correct your spelling
speech
, disinformation, etc. We will discuss each side of
impact
Correct article usage
the impact
show examples
with examples in
below
Correct article usage
the below
show examples
paragraph.
First,
let us consider the positive impact on local culture by international
media
by providing free or
low cost
Add a hyphen
low-cost
show examples
informative
videos
to remote areas.
For instance
, international
media
in recent years have demonstrated the effect of climate change on water scarcity in all
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
parts of the world and
urge
Wrong verb form
urged
show examples
farmers to move towards organic farming which could be
solution
Add an article
the solution
a solution
show examples
to the problem.
Thus
, through these
contents
Add a comma
contents,
show examples
more
resilent
Correct your spelling
resilient
and aware solutions are reaching
to
Change preposition
apply
show examples
farmers around the world which in turn
reduce
Correct subject-verb agreement
reduces
show examples
poverty and loss to a
nation
. On the other side, hate speech against any religion, person or community
along with
disinformation on internet
videos
could disturb the harmony and peace of a
nation
.
For example
, a person inciting provocative speech against a
nation
and urging a particular community to engage in attacks against that
nation
using disinformation as
tool
Add an article
a tool
show examples
could destroy the peace and unity of not only that community but
also
of that
nation
.
In addition
, it will create distrust and
voilence
Correct your spelling
violence
among the people of the country.
Thus
, these
videos
are very destructive and should be regulated by the government. To summarize, the
advanatges
Correct your spelling
advantages
of
these technology
Change the determiner
this technology
these technologies
show examples
and
resource
Fix the agreement mistake
resources
show examples
does
Change the verb form
do
show examples
outweigh the disadvantages. But to
ripe
Verb problem
reap
show examples
the full benefit of it, we need to regulate it as well.
These regulation
Change the determiner
This regulation
These regulations
show examples
should be very carefully prepared after a long and useful discussion with all the parties involved in the
nation
. In the end, I want to add that all types of
media
are mere tools and should be carefully used for building new things rather than destruction.
Submitted by akhilrana690041 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task achievement
Make sure your introduction clearly presents the topic and your opinion on it. A more direct statement about the overall impact and your stance on the advantages and disadvantages would offer clarity.
coherence cohesion
In the body paragraphs, systematically discuss the advantages and disadvantages. Each paragraph should focus on a specific aspect, clearly delineated from each other.
task achievement
Use more diverse and specific examples to support your arguments. While you mention climate change and hate speech, further detailing or additional examples could strengthen your position.
coherence cohesion
Improve the coherence of your essay by using a wider range of linking phrases and transitional words to better connect ideas and paragraphs.
task achievement
Conclude your essay by summarizing the main points and restating your opinion on the overall impact, making your stance clear and emphasizing the significance of your argument.
coherence cohesion
Proofread your essay for any grammatical mistakes or typos to enhance its overall clarity and professionalism.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: