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The table shows information about metro systems in six different cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows information about metro systems in six different cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table provides data concerning underground metro systems in six different capital cities around the world.
Overall
, as we can see, it brings the number of lines,
total
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the total
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 length of the lines, annual journeys made and the price of single tickets. Taking a look at the number of lines, New York
City
 and Beijing subways have higher figures which are 24 and 19, respectively.
However
,
London
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 tube has 11 and
Mexico
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the Mexico
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City
 metro
12
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. About the total length of each subway, the prior
city
 has 659 miles of railway, being the biggest one.
On the other hand
, Paris and
Mexico
City
 present
smallest
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the smallest
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 ones, 127 and 140 miles, in that order. People
traveling
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travelling
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 by underground systems in
a years
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a year
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 in Tokyo and Beijing are above 3.1
billions
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billion
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,
whereas
 the number of annual journeys in New York, London, Paris and
Mexico
are
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is
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 more than 1.65
billions
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billion
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. talking about the price of
single
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a single
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 ticket
payed
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paid
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 by
the
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apply
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travelers
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travellers
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, the cheapest one is in
Mexico
City
 costing $0.25 US dollars, followed by Beijing with $0.45.
Nonetheless
, London presents the most expensive price ticket, costing almost $8 dollars one single travel.
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