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Education is a critical element of the prosperity of any nation. The more educated people in a country are, the more successful their nation becomes.” Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with this statement. Support your point of view with reasons and/or examples from your own experience or observations.

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Many are of the opinion that a
country
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 where most of the population is highly educated, the more successful the nation itself will be. I agree with
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 statement and will explain why in
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, higher education in economics and engineering allows people to be ready to tackle
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 drivers like infrastructure and banking sectors, which are
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 factors for any
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’s
growth
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.
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, nations where the banking system allows the government to fund big infrastructure projects to shorten the distances
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 richer and poorer sides of the
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 will allow economic
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 in the less developed areas and provide skilled workers to the wealthier ones who are developing faster.
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,
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 politicians are more adapted to change and challenges; a
country
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 where most of the political leaders are
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 to tackle complex challenges
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 is prone to face more complex situations and find
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 way to fix or improve their status.
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, the Senate of a
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 where the politicians have a better educational background
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 will have an easier job
to approve
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 new laws, because the stages where the bills were born have been discussed more deeply and with
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 chances
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 discarded at the
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 minute, allowing the government to adapt to social changes faster and better. In conclusion, I agree with the fact that education is a critical element of prosperity for those nations who embrace it, allowing both
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 and social accelerated
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 as shown in the previous examples. I hope that all
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countries will embrace
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 idea because a world where education is accessible and affordable everywhere is destined to experience the advantages of
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global wealth at scale.
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To further support your main points, provide more varied and specific examples, possibly from a range of sources or personal experience, which directly relate to how education impacts nation prosperity.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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