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The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.
#information #changes #modes #travel #england
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The
given
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apply
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table chart highlights the information about
average
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the average
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 distance travelled
by
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apply
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per person in
miles
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 per year by different modes of travel in England from 1985 to 2000.
Overall
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 , the most used transport vehicle is
car
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a car
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 and
least
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the least
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 is
taxi
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a taxi
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 . People
had
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also
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 used
bicycle
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bicycles
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 in 1985 which
decread
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decreased
decreed
 in 2000 which is
same
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the same
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 for local buses. The average distance travelled by people
in
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by
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 train and taxi which
is
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was
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 289 and 13
miles
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 in 1995 increased to 366 and 42
miles
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 in 2000. But there is
also
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decrease
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a decrease
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 in
usage
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the usage
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 of transport vehicles like
bicycle
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bicycles
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 and local
business
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businesses
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 from 51 and 429
miles
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 in 1995 to 41 to 274
miles
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 in 2000. The usage of
car
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the car
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is
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skyrocketed even in 1985
as
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to
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 3199
miles
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 to 2000 as 4806
miles
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. Some other transport facilities and
long distance
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long-distance
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bus
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buses
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 rose from 450 and 54
miles
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 to 585 and 124 in the span of 15 years. Walking
is
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was
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 done by many people in 1985
as
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at
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 255
miles
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 dropping to 237
miles
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 in 2000.
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