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It is inevitable that as technology develops traditional cultures must be lost. Technology and tradition are incompatible – you cannot have both together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#technology #cultures #tradition
Invention
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 of technology has changed the
life
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 of many communities,tribes and backward
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 of society in many ways. It changed the way of living and
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 many recent
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 which has resulted them in adapting
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culture
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cultures
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 and traditions.It is undeniable for tradition and scientific inventions to sustain
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. I
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 with the fact that
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the customs
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,culture and
tradition
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 of
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 race are bound to change with the presence of technology.
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Logical Structure
Ensure there is a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. The introduction should present the topic and your stance clearly. Each body paragraph should focus on one main idea, supported by examples or explanations. The conclusion should summarize your main points and restate your position.
Introduction & Conclusion
Include an introductory sentence and a concluding sentence in each paragraph to guide the reader through your essay smoothly. Use linking words and phrases (e.g., furthermore, however, in conclusion) to connect ideas and paragraphs.
Supported Main Points
Develop your main points by including more detailed explanations, examples, or evidence. Each paragraph should explore your ideas thoroughly, showing how technology impacts traditional cultures specifically.
Complete Response
Address the task directly by explicitly stating to what extent you agree or disagree with the statement in the introduction. Expand on your opinion with clear and comprehensive reasons throughout the essay.
Clear & Comprehensive Ideas
Clarify your ideas by expanding on them with examples or reasoning. Make sure each paragraph clearly conveys a single idea related to the topic. Avoid vague statements by providing concrete examples or elaborating on how technology changes cultures.
Relevant & Specific Examples
Include specific examples to support your arguments. For instance, mention specific technologies and how they have impacted traditional cultures. This makes your essay more convincing and illustrates your points effectively.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inevitable
  • traditional cultures
  • incompatible
  • technological advancements
  • cultural preservation
  • historical heritage
  • globalization
  • hybridization
  • digital divide
  • cross-cultural interaction
  • economic incentives
  • generational perspectives
  • disruption
  • cultural identity
  • evolution of tradition
  • cultural resilience
  • heritage conservation
  • information technology
  • multiculturalism
  • cultural assimilation
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