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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compararions where releavant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compararions where releavant.
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The bar graph represents information about how families are spending their weekly salary between 1968 and 2018 in one region As mentioned
from
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 the graph, there were eight different categories that most families use their money. The highest contribution in 1968 was for food
while
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 the total amount of fuel and power was the least.
Otherwise
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, the biggest proportion of weekly income in 2018 was
housing
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 and the lowest was for personal goods.
To begin
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 with, the total amount of food spending in 1968 was 35%; housing contributed
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10%; fuel and power
was
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 around 7% of
families
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families'
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 weekly income.
Furthermore
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, clothing and
footware
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footwear
 were placed on the second rank as the most popular items with total usage of 10%. The total amount of household and personal goods
were
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 similar (around 8%)
,
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while
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 spending on transport and recreation
have differ
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 closely
around
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 2% In 2018, the highest percentage was leisure with a total
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of more
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 than 20%; followed by
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housing requirements (around 18%). The third
places
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 was dedicated
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 food with spending above 15% of total weekly income. Other remaining categories,
such
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 as
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fuel and power, clothing, household items, personal goods, and transport have
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 total proportion of 4%; 5%; 7%; 3%; and 14% respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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