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nowdays, many people choose to be self- employes, rather than to work for a company or organaisation. why might this be the case? what could be the disadvantages of being self employed?

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In
this
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 modern era, it is increasingly common for
people
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 to start their own start-ups and earn money , rather than
work
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 for
companies
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. Some
people
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 think there are many disadvantages if someone wishes to open a new business. In
this
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 essay, I will explore the reason why
people
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 are choosing to wish for their own start-ups and what are the drawbacks. Lately, the job market
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 extremely low and youth are unable to get one, so they end up working anywhere so they can earn some money.
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, the
companies
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 provide extra workload and extra hours without any extra pay
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, the
work
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 environment becomes extremely toxic which is not good for their mental health
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 the main reason for
people
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 leave their jobs and start their own
companies
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. For example, in inda has limited jobs and
companies
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 are paying lower wages
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, the majority of graduate students started their small businesses and they are trying to make many and they are
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self-employed
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.
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, whenever, someone wants to open their own business it requires capital and extra effort and they need to
work
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 hard for their own company which can take many years.
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, there are possible ways if they are unable to make it they can lose all their savings as it high a high-risk job. For instance, a study shows that worldwide a number of
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 started their own businesses
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 2% of them were successful rest were bankrupt.
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, the organisation should implement their
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 culture, and fixed working hours with mutual agreement so employees will happily
work
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 there.
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, before starting their own business they should search the market and learn.

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