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There are two different charts that illustrate the number of unemployed citizens in the US with average weekly earnings in 2005.

There are two different charts that illustrate the number of unemployed citizens in the US with average weekly earnings in 2005.
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There are two different charts that illustrate the number of unemployed citizens in the US with average weekly earnings in 2005. It can clearly be seen that a professional
degree
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 has the highest average weekly earnings and lowest
unemployment
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rate
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 in 2005 compared to other
degrees
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. Regarding the professional
degree
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, it has the highest average weekly salary with 1800
dollars
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 in 2005. Other than that, it
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 has the lowest
unemployment
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rate
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 with only 1.5% in 2005. The other
degree
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 that has similar data is a doctoral
degree
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 that has the exact same
unemployment
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rate
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.
However
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, the average salary per week is just below the professional
degree
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 which is 1740
dollars
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. The other two
degrees
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 that have similar percentages are master’s and bachelor’s
degrees
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. They both have
a higher
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higher unemployment rates
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unemployment
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 rates and almost reached 3% in 2005. The average
wages
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 per week for both master’s
degree
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 and bachelor’s
degrees
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, at 1560 and 1246
dollars
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 respectively. In terms of the other three professional
degrees
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, they have similarities with the highest
rate
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 of
unemployment
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 and low average weekly
wages
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 in 2005. Individuals that have no
degree
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 but follow some college had a high unoccupied
rate
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 at approximately 4.3% in 2005. It is
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 proportional to low
wages
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 at 701
dollars
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 on average salary per week. A high school diploma has a similar average weekly earnings at 701
dollars
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 but a higher
unemployment
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rate
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at
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 approximately 5.5% compared to the previous
degree
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. The highest
unemployment
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rate
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 amongst all
degrees
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 is individuals that have less than a high school diploma reaching 8% and lowest
wages
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 538
dollars
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 on average weekly in 2005.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words degree, unemployment, rate, degrees, dollars, wages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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