This is a part of a letter your receive from an English pen friend. Don't forget to tell me about the area you live in and what you and your friends do in your free time. Write a letter to your pen friend. Write your letter in about 100 words.

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Dear Love Hundal, I hope you are doing great. First of all, thank you for sending me birthday wishes on my special day which was quite satisfying. The

last

letter that I received a few days ago had questions about my address and the activities I do in my spare time with my friends.

Firstly

, I would like to share my place of residence which is Keppel Circle in Brampton. I live on the outskirts of the city which has quite a supportive neighbourhood and beautiful surroundings. My house is designed by one of the famous architects of the city. It is an energy-efficient house as it has large windows which allow natural light to enter.

Moreover

, I spend my free time with my friends in the gorgeous garden near our house.

This

garden has many colourful flowers and trees with a track for jogging which I often visit with my best friend.

Additionally

, we have a new public library in our area that has thousands of books to read; I frequently pay a visit to the library to read knowledgeable books.

While

on weekends, we always go camping in a new place. I hope to see you soon. Best regards, Tajinder Singh

Submitted by tajinder.panag on Mon Dec 25 2023

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coherence cohesion

Ensure that the letter follows a clear and logical structure. While the content is good, breaking down the information into distinct paragraphs will enhance cohesion.

task achievement

It is important to address all parts of the prompt. You included personal activities and the area where you live but could provide more specific examples of what you do with your friends.

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Pay attention to maintaining a friendly and consistent tone throughout your letter, as it is an informal letter to a pen friend.

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

203 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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This is a part of a letter your receive from an English pen friend. Don't forget to tell me about the area you live in and what you and your friends do in your free time. Write a letter to your pen friend. Write your letter in about 100 words.

A person's worth seems to be judge by appearance and social status more than traditional values of kindness, trust and honour. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think it’s better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. other people believe it’s good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Government should spend money on railway rather than on result. Do you agree or disagree?

bar chart on average time (hours) a teacher spent teaching in three different school types in 4 countries in 2001

Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?