In some areas of the USA, a ‘curfew’ is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?
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USA
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the USA
a
particular Change preposition
at a
time
at night. They may come out with any older people their
relations. In my Change preposition
in their
opinion
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opinion,
,
because reduces juvenile delinquency. Remove the comma
apply
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teenagers spend more evenings at home with family and do exercises.
On the one hand, around the Add a comma
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world
there are various juvenile Add a comma
world,
delinquency
in these years. Fix the agreement mistake
delinquents
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humans face Add a comma
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to so
many causes Rephrase
apply
juvenile
crime Change preposition
of juvenile
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apply
due to
the increase in family violence. It shows an inclinations
to abuse their children and treat them as an outlet Correct the article-noun agreement
inclination
of
stress. If leaves Change preposition
for
youngs
or teenagers Correct your spelling
young
and
they can do anything Correct word choice
apply
if
they want to do. In my opinion limits of minersCorrect word choice
apply
is
the best for them. Because Correct subject-verb agreement
are
this
limit reduces risks not only younger
but only Change preposition
for younger
adults
. Change preposition
for adults
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children can be close Add a comma
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their
family Change preposition
to their
member
. Fix the agreement mistake
members
For
example
some teenagers who Add a comma
example,
is
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are
orphan
or there are Fix the agreement mistake
orphans
not
older people in their house, have Correct your spelling
no
tendency
and Correct article usage
a tendency
risks
for crime. So Fix the agreement mistake
risk
that
limits are excellent.
Correct pronoun usage
those
On the other
hand
many Add a comma
hand,
youngs
waste of Correct your spelling
young
time
in the streets ( or computer clubs, bars or other clubs) . However
, they have a lot of homework and other works
at home, they do not save Fix the agreement mistake
work
the
Correct article usage
apply
time
so that
they come across some problems. If they spend leisure Correct word choice
apply
time
for lessons and their family. Maybe there are good sides for adolescents. For
instance
minors are careful Add a comma
instance,
Change preposition
with themselves
themselves
families. Correct pronoun usage
their
Additionally
they would shape relationships. No doubt , much more reading is Add a comma
Additionally,
ladder
for the future, so that Add an article
a ladder
the ladder
time
is as gold and youthful must study.
In conclusion, control of Correct article usage
the youngs
youngs
is imposed in some states of Correct your spelling
young
USA
and they have some good sides. In my Correct article usage
the USA
view
adolescents must be limited when they reach their dream or their Add a comma
view,
parents
dreamChange noun form
parent's
parents'
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