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Nowadays anyone can post news on internet. As a result, we cannot trust information we read there. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#anyone #post #news #internet #trust #information
In
this
 digital world,
people
 often depend on online websites and apps for accessing new
information
. But the question is, are these sites trustworthy? I agree that there are very limited restrictions in posting individual ideas online, making it vulnerable, yet I believe, we can utilize the benefit of the digital world with a mindful use of it. It is undeniable that the
Internet
 has become the means to express individual thoughts and ideas.
However
,
this
 trend has often been misused, with many
people
 overpouring their beliefs into online platforms. The Wikipedia page, which was once the supreme source for any
information
, has now become a normal website
due to
 the unrestricted alternations made by individuals.
Moreover
, the
internet
 search engine might tend to incline you towards specific viewpoints,
such
 as those of a particular political party, by prioritizing related news and articles.
Nevertheless
, these issues are considerably small when compared to the vast knowledge that the
internet
 provides.
Internet
 servers as a primary source
for
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of
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 knowledge and education for many
people
. There
are
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is
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 a wide range of news websites that are still trustworthy and
provides
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provide
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 the same or even greater number of articles that are published in their hardcopy counterparts. By exercising mindfulness, one can find identify reliable sites that publish genuine
artifacts
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artefacts
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 and news.
Additionally
,
internet
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the internet
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 provides access to a large number of sources, thereby, allowing
people
 to cross-verify the
information
 they
received
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.
To conclude
, the
internet
 is a realm where both genuine and fabricated
information
 based on individual perspectives exist.
However
, the choice to perceive the
information
 still remains with individuals.
Therefore
, by
cross verifying
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 the
information
 we receive, and by relying
only
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only on
only upon
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 trustworthy sites, we can enjoy the benefits of the knowledge that the
internet
 provides.
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Task Response
To improve task response, try to directly and explicitly address the prompt throughout your essay. This could involve stating your agreement or disagreement more clearly in both the introduction and conclusion. Furthermore, integrating more direct and varied examples that support your viewpoint will strengthen your response.
Coherence & Cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, ensure your essay flows logically from one idea to the next. You have a good basis, but making your transitions smoother and your ideas more interconnected will enhance readability. Additionally, vary your linking phrases and ensure paragraphs are well-developed and unified around a single main idea.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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