While some believe that the best way to learn about current events is through newspapers, others think that they can learn new better through other forms of media. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some argue that the most outstanding source of
news
is the
newspaper
,
while
others argue that different forms of media
such
as television,
radio
, and the
internet
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are more suitable
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current affairs.
While
newspaper
offers credibility, I believe that the TV,
radio
, and the
internet
are better
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because
people
can access it anytime. On the one hand,
people
can be sure that the information they get
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from the
newspaper
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from credible sources. Stories undergo fact-checking before they publish them.
Also
, they cover stories from background information to multiple
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of the issues.
This
ensures that the reader will get accurate information and will be able to understand every
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of the story.
For example
, the Manila Times is one of the oldest
newspaper
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in the Philippines. Even though it was founded more than a century ago, they are still operating
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this
day.
This
proves that
people
trust their credibility.
However
, it will take some time for them to release the
news
because the editors have to check it first and it will take some time to print the paper.
On the other hand
, other forms of media
such
as television,
radio
, and the
internet
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are more accessible
outlet
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of
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current affairs. They can give
people
access to
news
everywhere and anywhere. They allow
people
to have options and compare different views from
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another news outlet
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news
outlet
.
Also
, it provides users
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breaking
news
and everyone around the globe can access it.
For instance
, everyone
in
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the planet has a better grasp of the war between Israel and Gaza because of the
news
in
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television and
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the internet
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internet
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.
People
are able to witness the heart-breaking damage of the war in both countries.
Thus
, I believe that these sources are better than
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. In conclusion,
while
some argue that paper-print
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of
news
are more credible, I believe that
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TV,
radio
, and social media are the best
outlet
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for current events because it is more accessible to individuals.
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