Many people believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
In
modern
world, famous Add an article
the modern
people
receive too much recognition from the media
. For
this
reason, some individuals dispute that these observable event
may have some detrimental influence on Change the determiner
this observable event
these observable events
young
generation, Add an article
the young
where's
others believe that Correct your spelling
whereas
it
can be beneficial as well. In Correct pronoun usage
they
this
essay, i
will discuss both views Change the capitalization
I
while
giving appropriate answer
.
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answers
To begin
, in some ways, it can negatively impact to
children. Nowadays many adolescence seems to compete with each other, especially when it comes to football players. Change preposition
apply
For example
, because of these
players Correct determiner usage
apply
such
as Ronaldo or Messi
some Add a comma
Messi,
people
may become rivalries in their
real life, Correct pronoun usage
apply
where's
debating who is better. Verb problem
apply
However
, in some circumstances
it may encourage them to be more Add a comma
circumstances,
respectfull
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respectful
while
showing famous people
's life. This
factor may be beneficial, due to
the fact that it may lead them to be more friendly.
On the other hand
, there are some benefits in
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to
media
coverage. Youngsters might gain some skills and even find motivation through them in the way of their accomplishments. For instance
, while
doing so they can easily achieve their goals. Nevertheless
, while
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when
comparing
to these famous Wrong verb form
compared
people
youngsters may feel themselves under pressure. Moreover
, imitating
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by imitating
to
them, children alter their Change preposition
apply
life
and Fix the agreement mistake
lives
hairstyle
.
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hairstyles
To sum up
, media
coverage of famous people
can have positive and negative impacts on children. However
I strongly disagree that it has more Add a comma
However,
drawback
sides on Fix the agreement mistake
drawbacks
young
generation as the Correct article usage
the young
media
tends to inspire them through their achievements.Submitted by ruznadir on
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