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Buying things in internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries is becoming more popular. Do advantage of this outweigh disadvantage.

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Technology plays a crucial role in human lives in
modern
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 era.
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, these days
people
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 tend to purchase
things
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 from online shopping and it is quite popular across the globe.
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 trend has more
benefits
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 than drawbacks and
this
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 essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons. There are several advantages of buying
products
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from
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online.
One
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 of the major
benefits
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 is that it can reduce the population's shopping time.
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 means they wherever and whenever place the order
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online within a fraction of
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seconds
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. Another possible benefit is that variety of collections and brands in
one
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people
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 have more choices and they can differentiate between the competitor's
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 too.
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, eBay is
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 of the
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leading online shopping
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, it provides more offers when any special
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such
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individuals have a chance to buy
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 in a half amount. Needless to say, buying
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from
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online
provide
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 numerous
benefits
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 to customers. Despite these
benefits
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, buying
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from
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online has some drawbacks.
One
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 of the main disadvantages is that it takes more time for delivery
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 of instant, so
people
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 have to wait more than
one
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 month or week to get that.
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, eBay usually takes three to six weeks
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the
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international delivery. Another disadvantage is
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that
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 lack of quality, which
people
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 do not have a chance to touch that product so they show
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picture
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 of the product and deliver
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the
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cheap quality
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of
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things
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. They might
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 not only the local standard of
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 but
also
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products
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. In conclusion, online purchasing is more accessible
as well as
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preference
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 in
one
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 place are the
benefits
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. It takes more time for delivery and local standard
products
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 might be sent are the drawbacks of online purchasing.

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Ensure your essay directly addresses the key points of the prompt. Your introduction should more clearly state if the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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Expand upon your examples by providing more specific details to better support your main points.
coherence and cohesion
Work on your essay's structure to enhance logic and flow. Link ideas more effectively between paragraphs.
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In your conclusion, more explicitly weigh the advantages against the disadvantages to directly answer the essay question.
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