The map below shows two potential locations for a shopping mall in the city of Brandfield. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows two potential locations for a shopping mall in the city of

Brandfield.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make

comparisons where relevant.
the given map
illustrate
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illustrates
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the data of two locations for shopping
centre
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centres
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in
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brand field
Bradfield
brandfield
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Brandfield City
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city
after the analysis, it is clearly stated that
zone
s1 is located
at
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in
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the
city
centre
and
zone
s2 is located in
countryside
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the countryside
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. in the
direction
of
northwest
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the northwest
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,
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the large area is captured by the golf and park course
while
the river and the main road
bisecting
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bisect
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each other next to
city
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the city
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centre
after which, the river line move towards north and
main
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the main
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road goes toward east
in addition
, to north
direction
residential housing estate is built adjacent to s1
furthermore
, in
zone
s2 railway route is
there
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apply
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in the northeast
direction
which
surpassing
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both the river and main road
next,
in the same
direction
at the bottom a large industrial area is there which is used to
manufactured
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. in the middle, a large
city
centre
is established for the
people
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recreation
overall
, it is vividly manifested that both
zone
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zones
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has
its
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their
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pros and cons when choosing a location for constructing a shopping
centre
however
,
zone
s2 has
wider
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a wider
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area which is
major
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a major
the major
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advantage of catching
people
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people's
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attention greatly
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, city, zone, direction with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • shopping mall
  • city center
  • suburbs
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • environmental considerations
  • infrastructure
  • urban planning
  • development
  • consumer behavior
  • green spaces
  • residential area
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