IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 2.5

n increaring number of professionals, such as doctors and scientists, are leaving their poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What Solutions can you suggest this situation?

✍️ Want to check your own essay?Start now →
Introduction
Nowadays.the majority of
people
Use synonyms
 of
professional
Fix the agreement mistake
professionals
show examples
sush
Correct your spelling
such
 as
doctors
Use synonyms
 and scientists are Departure from
thier
Correct your spelling
their
 country to
other country
Change the wording
another country
other countries
show examples
 in
this
Linking Words
 essay I am discussing the
Use synonyms
proplem
Correct your spelling
problem
 and
give
Wrong verb form
giving
show examples
 my opinion
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
Use synonyms
solution
Correct article usage
a solution
show examples
 .
Body · 1
Firstly
Linking Words
 there are a lot of problems
Use synonyms
first
Correct article usage
the first
show examples
 point is it is difficult
to
Change preposition
for
show examples
Linking Words
this
Correct determiner usage
these
show examples
people
Use synonyms
 to
understanding
Wrong verb form
understand
show examples
the deal of
Change the quantifier
a lot of
many
plenty of
show examples
people
Use synonyms
 because the
Correct your spelling
people
peolpe
Correct your spelling
people
 can't understand
the
Correct pronoun usage
them
show examples
for example
Linking Words
 :
doctors
Use synonyms
 are
Correct your spelling
giving
gaiving
Correct your spelling
giving
 them
people
Use synonyms
 medicine and
people
Use synonyms
 need
other type
Change the wording
another type
other types
show examples
 of medicine that it
first
Use synonyms
 point
moreover
Linking Words
 science or
doctors
Use synonyms
 where
them
Correct your spelling
the
show examples
people
Use synonyms
 lived or how
cost
Add the particle
to cost
show examples
 it monthly
In my opinion
Add the comma(s)
, In my opinion,
show examples
that is
Linking Words
 a
Use synonyms
proplem
Correct your spelling
problem
 because it
is spend
Change the verb form
is spending
show examples
 a lot of many on
other country
Change the wording
another country
other countries
show examples
that is
Linking Words
 second
Use synonyms
proplem
Correct your spelling
problem
Body · 2
On
other
Correct article usage
the other
show examples
 hand .there are
Use synonyms
solution
Fix the agreement mistake
solutions
show examples
of
Change preposition
to
show examples
this
Linking Words
 problem the
first
Use synonyms
solution
Use synonyms
with
Change preposition
to
show examples
Use synonyms
first
Correct article usage
the first
show examples
Use synonyms
proplem
Correct your spelling
problem
Use synonyms
doctors
Add a missing verb
is doctors
show examples
 or science are giving
this
Linking Words
 person what they need and so there will empty
this
Linking Words
Use synonyms
proplem
Correct your spelling
problem
 more over
this
Linking Words
 is
for
Change preposition
apply
show examples
solution
Use synonyms
 the second
Use synonyms
proplem
Correct your spelling
problem
doctors
Use synonyms
 and science are working with
same
Correct article usage
the same
show examples
 city Do you live it is better than work with place and other homesaty .
Conclusion
To coneclotion in my perspective the majority of
proplems
Correct your spelling
problems
 are
this
Linking Words
people
Use synonyms
 spend too much money to
staying
Wrong verb form
stay
show examples
on
Change preposition
in
show examples
other city
Change the wording
another city
other cities
show examples
 the
solution
Use synonyms
of
Change preposition
to
show examples
this
Linking Words
 problem is
Use synonyms
people
Change preposition
for people
show examples
 are living
with
Change preposition
in
show examples
same
Correct article usage
the same
show examples
 city work and stay .

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

structure
Focus on structuring your essay clearly with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each section should serve a distinct purpose.
cohesion
Use cohesive devices (e.g., conjunctions, pronouns, coherent paragraphing) to improve the flow of your essay. Ensuring that ideas transition smoothly from one to another enhances readability and coherence.
task response
Address the task directly by discussing the specific problems caused by professionals leaving poorer countries and suggesting viable solutions. Make sure your response is focused and answers all parts of the question.
examples
Include relevant, specific examples to support your points. These examples should clearly illustrate the problems and solutions you are discussing, providing clarity and depth to your argument.
language
Consider revising for grammatical accuracy and a wider range of vocabulary. Errors can distract from your argument and reduce the clarity of your essay. Aim to use precise language that effectively communicates your ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: