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n increaring number of professionals, such as doctors and scientists, are leaving their poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What Solutions can you suggest this situation?

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Introduction
Nowadays.the majority of
people
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professional
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professionals
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such
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doctors
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 and scientists are Departure from
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their
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another country
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this
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give
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Body paragraph 1
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 there are a lot of problems
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 point is it is difficult
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people
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the deal of
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a lot of
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people
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people
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people
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doctors
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giving
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people
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 medicine and
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 of medicine that it
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 science or
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people
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 it monthly
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that is
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problem
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 a lot of many on
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that is
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problem
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On
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 hand .there are
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solution
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of
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this
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with
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the first
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problem
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doctors
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 or science are giving
this
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 person what they need and so there will empty
this
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problem
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solution
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doctors
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 and science are working with
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 city Do you live it is better than work with place and other homesaty .
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To coneclotion in my perspective the majority of
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people
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staying
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on
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other city
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another city
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solution
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people
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 are living
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same
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 city work and stay .

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structure
Focus on structuring your essay clearly with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each section should serve a distinct purpose.
cohesion
Use cohesive devices (e.g., conjunctions, pronouns, coherent paragraphing) to improve the flow of your essay. Ensuring that ideas transition smoothly from one to another enhances readability and coherence.
task response
Address the task directly by discussing the specific problems caused by professionals leaving poorer countries and suggesting viable solutions. Make sure your response is focused and answers all parts of the question.
examples
Include relevant, specific examples to support your points. These examples should clearly illustrate the problems and solutions you are discussing, providing clarity and depth to your argument.
language
Consider revising for grammatical accuracy and a wider range of vocabulary. Errors can distract from your argument and reduce the clarity of your essay. Aim to use precise language that effectively communicates your ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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