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This pictures below show how tomato ketchup is made. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

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the diagram highlights the process by which a tomato ketchup is manufactured
the first step is
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that
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to
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 the tomatoes which are grown,
pluck
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plucked
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it
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apply
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from the plant and put
it
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apply
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in
the
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a
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 basket after the analysis, collecting and sorting out good and bad
it
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apply
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then
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, packed and went to the factory using a lorry once, the skin and seeds are removed they are
then
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 put it in the container ready for crushing and turn to liquid at the same time three spices
such
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 as salt, vinegar and sugar are added in it after crushing
furthermore
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, the soup container
are
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is
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then
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 put on the heat stove for two hours which
combine
Correct subject-verb agreement
combines
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 the flavour when the soup is ready after heating they are
then
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 poured
in
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into
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 the bottles by
labeling
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labelling
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it
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them
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 with a company tag mentioning quality control
next,
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the bottles are packed into boxes,
then
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 the boxes are delivered to supermarkets
finally
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, make it use with hamburger and fries for dinner
overall
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, it is vividly manifested that it is a linear process and
contained
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contains
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 fifteen steps,
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beginning
begining
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beginning
 with
plucking
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the plucking
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 of tomatoes and ending up with using
on
Correct pronoun usage
them on
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 hamburgers and fries
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Task Achievement
To enhance your Task Achievement score, ensure that you address all parts of the task comprehensively. Break down the process into clear, distinct steps and consider exploring the purpose or significance of each step more deeply.
Coherence and Cohesion
To improve Coherence and Cohesion, organize your essay more logically. Consider using clear paragraphing to distinguish between different stages of the process. Using a variety of linking words (e.g., firstly, next, furthermore, finally) can help improve the flow of information.
Task Achievement
Increase the specificity and clarity of your ideas by providing brief explanations or examples for some steps in the process. This will enrich your essay and make it more informative.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harvesting
  • ripe
  • sorting
  • washing
  • crushing
  • paste
  • cooking
  • ingredients
  • sugar
  • vinegar
  • spices
  • flavor
  • bottling
  • sterilized
  • labeling
  • distribution
  • packing
  • transport
  • retailers
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