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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Austrailian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Austrailian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The pie charts describe the shares of
use
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 of household
energy
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 in Australia and how they affect
greenhouse
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 gas
emissions
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.
It is clear that
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 most of the
energy
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 is used for heating in an average Australian household,
whereas
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 water heating is responsible for the greater portion of
greenhouse
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emissions
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. Despite, heating stands at 42%, it causes less than a quarter of
emissions
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.
In addition
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, the percentages of refrigeration and lighting are twice
higher
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as high
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 on the chart of
emissions
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 than on the chart of the
use
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 of
energy
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.
In contrast
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, Australian families
use
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 the least
energy
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 for cooling, only 2%, and it
also
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 has the least impact on
greenhouse
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emissions
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. All in all, the represented year can not be read from the charts,
hence
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, the actuality of the information is questionable. As far as the technologies have improved in
this
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 couple of years, we can approximately predict that the ratios of
energy
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use
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 and
greenhouse
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 gas emission will change.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words use, energy, greenhouse, emissions with synonyms.
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