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The map below show the changes that acurred to a town named Willington in 1780, 1860 and 2000.

The map below show the changes that acurred to a town named Willington in 1780, 1860 and 2000.
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The given maps illustrate changes were happened in the town of Willington in various periods 1780, 1860 and 2000. From the
overall
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 perspective, villages
were emerged
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emerged
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 enormously in the given
last
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 period as compared
the
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to the
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 previous period. Another noticeable interesting alter was
farm
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 land, it removed by
bridge
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a bridge
the bridge
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. In detail, in 1780,there was
not
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no
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 bridge but
the
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in the
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 next period bridge was constructed between
river
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rivers
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. Houses were located
in
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apply
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near
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farm
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farms
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, which was 100
homes
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 but
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homes
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the homes
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 number
was increases
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was increased
was increasing
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 by 200 in 1860 and it
was
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apply
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increased rapidly which was 500
homes
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 in 2000. In 1780,
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the farm
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farm
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a farm
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situated
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was situated
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in
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apply
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near the river and it was reduced by
sizes
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size
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 in
other
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the other
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 next two periods
while
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 many shops were built near bridges in 2000. In 1780
,
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 and 1860, both these periods school
was
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were
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 not there but in 2000, two schools were newly constructed by removed
woods place
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Woods Place
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.
Similarly
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, sports fields were built newly in 2000 near school, which was three.
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, in 2000,
wetland
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a wetland
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 was constructed newly and it was
suitiated
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situated
bottom
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the bottom
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 of the river
as well as
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farm
Correct article usage
a farm
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 area was made newly between the
homes
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 and schools.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words farm, homes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • town
  • changes
  • occurred
  • 1780
  • 1860
  • 2000
  • map
  • show
  • named
  • Willington
  • introduction
  • overview
  • comparison
  • conclusion
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