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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram delineates the process of generating
electricity
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 in a hydroelectric
power
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 station,
this
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 process consists of two parts,day and night.During the day,high-level
reservoir
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water
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 is flowing to the reversible
turbines
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 to make
generator
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a generator
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 to produce
electricity
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.During the night,the
water
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 is pumped back to the high-level
reservoir
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. In the term of day,the
water
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 from
river
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a river
the river
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 will stocked in the high-level
reservoir
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 and blocked by a dam.In the first stage,the intake,which is at the bottom of the dam,will open to let
water
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 flow into the reversible
turbines
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.
Following
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this
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,the
water
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 flow makes the
turbines
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 rotate and drive the generator to work,which is on the top space of the
power
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 station.In the final stage,the
power
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 lines will transport the
electricity
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 conducted by the generator to the National grid. When it comes to the night,the
water
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 stocked in the low-level
reservoir
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 will be pumped back into the high-level
reservoir
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 by the reversible
turbines
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 through the same tubes.Subsequent to
this
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,the
water
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 will stay there since the intake is closed,it won't open until
next
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the next
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 morning and start a new cycle.
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, the stages involved in producing
electricity
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 in hydroelectric
power
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stationhave
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stations
has
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have
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 been completed.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, power, reservoir, water, turbines with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • potential energy
  • mechanical energy
  • electrical energy
  • turbine
  • generator
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • power lines
  • gate-controlled tunnels
  • gravity-driven
  • transformation
  • clean energy source
  • sustainable
  • recycled water
  • mountainous area
  • activate
  • transmit
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