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University students should pay the full cost of their studies because a university education benefits individuals rather than society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#university #students #cost #studies #education #individuals #society
It is argued that college
students
 should
paid
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 all of the cost of learning because the benefits things that affect
to
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individuals outweigh society. In
this
 essay, I will discuss why
this
view
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 point flawed and give examples to improve my opinions.
Firstly
,
tuitions
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tuition
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fees
is
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are
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 one of the huge things that
defense
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defence
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students
 have chances to attend their
favorite
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favourite
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 universities because the total
fees
, which are spent for studying a course account
of
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 numerous budgets.
Therefore
, it is a drawback for society
when
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that
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 currently
lack
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lacks
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of
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high-qualityc
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high-quality
 employees
such
 as engineers, medical employees and scientists.
For instance
, there was a result of a survey show about 50
percent
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 of
students
 had to select low-cost majors
instead
 of
favorite
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favourite
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 majors.
Overall
,
tuitions
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tuition
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fees
 will affect to quality of talented
students
 who lack of financial budget to follow courses.
On the other hand
,
this
 problem
also
 has a
differant
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different
 drawback when all course
on
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at
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 the college is
no
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not
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 charged,
this
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the universities will have not enough
finance
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finances
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for hiring
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to hire
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 people who
own
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 high levels of
professional
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.
Therefore
, it
cause
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causes
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of damaged
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damage
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for
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to
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 the quality of
students
 when not served by them.
By contrast
, low-salary teachers
also
 reduce levels of concentration when
teach
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students
, because they can attend other works for
living
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a living
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. As
the
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 result, course
fees
also
 is a method that
help
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 increase
high
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the high
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 standard of studying.
For instance
,
the
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Cambridge
university
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where
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which
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 have high
tuitions
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tuition
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fees
 but
they
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apply
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still keep
position
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its position
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 is one of the best
unversities
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universities
 all over the world. In conclusion, the cost of university despite one of the problems for
attract
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attracting
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 the attention of
talent
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talented
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 people but it
also
 is a mount of budget for hiring high-quality researchers and scientists to increase valuable courses. In my opinion, universities should not only consider tuition costs to suit the majority of
student
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students
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 but
also
remain
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maintain
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 the quality of courses.
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