The Following Diagram Shows how Greenhouse Gases Trap Energy from The Sun
The natural process illustrates how the
energy
coming from the Sun is retained by greenhouse
gases. Overall
, this
is a complex process which contain
two phases Change the verb form
contains
includes
producing Wrong verb form
including
greenhouse
gas emissions and energy
is
trapped in the Earth.
The process commences with how the emission gases are produced, CO2 and other pollutants are always emitted by human activities Unnecessary verb
apply
such
as industrial factory
, Fix the agreement mistake
factories
Correct word choice
and engine's
engine's
vehicles which can easily Change noun form
engine
to
release Fix the infinitive
apply
the
carbon dioxide. Correct article usage
apply
Additionally
, deforestation is also
an important reason because there is
no more trees Correct subject-verb agreement
are
can
absorb the carbon dioxide in the air to make it clean and fresh so the pollutants Correct pronoun usage
that can
is
released into the atmosphere.
Regarding the second phase of how these Change the verb form
are
greenhouse
gas emission
Fix the agreement mistake
emissions
trapping
Replace the word
trap
energy
, the Sun emits the energy
and it reaches the Earth's surface as heat and make
it warm. Change the verb form
makes
Subsequently
, some of this
heat energy
is radiated into space whereas
the others is
trapped by the Change the verb form
are
greenhouse
gases so that it is reflected off atmosphere
, leading to a warming effect.Add an article
the atmosphere
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