The Following Diagram Shows how Greenhouse Gases Trap Energy from The Sun

The Following Diagram Shows how Greenhouse Gases Trap Energy from The Sun
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The natural process illustrates how the
energy
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coming from the Sun is retained by
greenhouse
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gases.
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,
this
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is a complex process which
contain
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two phases
includes
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producing
greenhouse
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gas emissions and
energy
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is
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trapped in the Earth. The process commences with how the emission gases are produced, CO2 and other pollutants are always emitted by human activities
such
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as industrial
factory
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factories
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,
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and engine's
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engine's
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engine
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vehicles which can easily
to
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release
the
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carbon dioxide.
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, deforestation is
also
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an important reason because there
is
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no more trees
can
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absorb the carbon dioxide in the air to make it clean and fresh so the pollutants
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released into the atmosphere. Regarding the second phase of how these
greenhouse
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gas
emission
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emissions
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trapping
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energy
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, the Sun emits the
energy
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and it reaches the Earth's surface as heat and
make
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it warm.
Subsequently
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, some of
this
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heat
energy
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is radiated into space
whereas
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the others
is
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trapped by the
greenhouse
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gases so that it is reflected off
atmosphere
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, leading to a warming effect.
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