The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
The line chart illustrates the figures
of
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tourists visiting a certain Caribbean island over ten years (from 2010 to 2017). Units are measured in millions of
visitors
.
Overall
, the largest number of tourists was
at the end
of the period.
Also
, there was a significant climb in the ratio of
visitors
staying on cruise ships;
in contrast
, the proportion of
visitors
staying on land fluctuated slightly. It is clear from the graph that the total number of
visitors
started at 1
million
,
then
improved dramatically to reach a peak of 3.5
million
at the end
of the interval.
Whereas
, the percentage of tourists staying on cruises began at just
under.
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under
5million, after which there was considerable growth by around 1.5
million
in 2017. In regard to
visitors
who stay on the island, it started at just over
0.5million
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0.5 million
, followed by a slight rise to nearly 1
million
in 2013,
then
a fluctuation to reach 1.5
million
at the end
of the span.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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