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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
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The line chart illustrates the figures
of
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for
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 tourists visiting a certain Caribbean island over ten years (from 2010 to 2017). Units are measured in millions of
visitors
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.
Overall
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, the largest number of tourists was
at the end
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 of the period.
Also
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, there was a significant climb in the ratio of
visitors
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 staying on cruise ships;
in contrast
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, the proportion of
visitors
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 staying on land fluctuated slightly. It is clear from the graph that the total number of
visitors
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 started at 1
million
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,
then
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 improved dramatically to reach a peak of 3.5
million
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at the end
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 of the interval.
Whereas
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, the percentage of tourists staying on cruises began at just
under.
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under
5million, after which there was considerable growth by around 1.5
million
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 in 2017. In regard to
visitors
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 who stay on the island, it started at just over
0.5million
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0.5 million
, followed by a slight rise to nearly 1
million
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 in 2013,
then
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 a fluctuation to reach 1.5
million
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at the end
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 of the span.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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