The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

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tourists visiting a certain Caribbean island over ten years (from 2010 to 2017). Units are measured in millions of

visitors

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Overall

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, the largest number of tourists was

at the end

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of the period.

Also

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, there was a significant climb in the ratio of

visitors

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staying on cruise ships;

in contrast

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, the proportion of

visitors

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staying on land fluctuated slightly. It is clear from the graph that the total number of

visitors

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started at 1

million

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then

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improved dramatically to reach a peak of 3.5

million

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at the end

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of the interval.

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, the percentage of tourists staying on cruises began at just

under.

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under

5million, after which there was considerable growth by around 1.5

million

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in 2017. In regard to

visitors

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who stay on the island, it started at just over

0.5million

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0.5 million

, followed by a slight rise to nearly 1

million

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in 2013,

then

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a fluctuation to reach 1.5

million

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at the end

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of the span.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, million with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

161 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

fluctuation
peak
trough
upward trend
downward trend
steady increase
sharp decline
seasonal variation
cruise ship visitors
island stay visitors
economic impact
environmental impact
tourism industry
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