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In some societies, the number of crimes committed by teenagers is growing. Some people think that regardless of age, teenagers who commit major crimes should receive adult punishments. To what extent do you agree

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Unfortunately, these days the number of youth
crimes
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 is increasing in some countries. Some
people
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 argue that to deal with these
crimes
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, young
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 should be punished as much as adults.
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 youngsters need
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 when they commit a crime, I personally believe they should receive a lighter sentence than adults.
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 with, if young children receive adult punishment, they might be negatively influenced by time in adult prisons.
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 to say that, they may meet
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 in prison who have committed very serious
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 and wrongly emulate them.
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, they may learn about many
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 that did not know about before,
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 as theft and extortion.
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, heavy sentences may have an adverse effect on their mental health.
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, they may suffer from depression and anxiety in the future.
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, teenagers are not fully responsible for their
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.
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, they do not have much experience and do not know the world properly; sometimes they are not aware of
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 of their action.
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, they do not know that many murders happen when
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 are angry.
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 youngsters need re-education, not punishment and
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 bad
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 is easier to change when a person is young. Take teaching jobs that can earn money from an early age as a patently obvious example, which can be useful for improving one’s character and standing in the future. In conclusion,
youth
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people
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 must be punished so that they do not repeat
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 crime again, but a punishment suitable for their age that will have a positive effect on them, not a negative one.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Juvenile delinquency
  • Rehabilitation
  • Adolescent development
  • Impulsive behavior
  • Criminal justice system
  • Deterrence
  • Recidivism
  • Moral reasoning
  • Developmental psychology
  • Restorative justice
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