The table below shows the number of visitors in the UK and their average spending from 2003 to 2008.
The table gives information about the
number
of people
who visit
the United Kingdom and their average Wrong verb form
visited
expense
between 2003 and 2008. Fix the agreement mistake
expenses
Overall
, the number
of visitors
and their average spending relatively increased over the period.
Starting from 2003, the number
of visitors
was recorded at 24.715 millions
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million
of
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apply
people
. After that, 11.855 pound
billions was spent with a total average spend Fix the agreement mistake
pounds
at
475 Change preposition
of
pound
per Change to a plural noun
pounds
visits
. Fix the agreement mistake
visit
Addition
to that, Change preposition
In addition
people
usually had 8.2 nights
per visits
.
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visit
Furthermore
, 31.88 millions
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million
of
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apply
people
visited the UK in 2008. From that data, the number
of visitors
also
had a significant grow
from 2003. Replace the word
growth
Then
, the average of
spending and Change preposition
apply
spend
per Wrong verb form
spending
visits
experienced an increase to 16.323 Fix the agreement mistake
visit
pound billions
and 511 Fix the agreement mistake
pounds billion
pound
per Change to a plural noun
pounds
visits
respectively. Fix the agreement mistake
visit
However
, the average nights
per Correct quantifier usage
number of nights
visits
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visit
reduced
to 7.7 Add a missing verb
was reduced
nights
per visits
.
In conclusion, the total Fix the agreement mistake
visit
number
of visitors
in the UK increased from 2003 to 2008. In addition
to that, the amount of money spent also
rose significantly from time to time. However
, the average nights
per visits
had a slight decrease Fix the agreement mistake
visit
compare
to 2003.Change the form of the verb
compared
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, visitors, pound, visits, nights with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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