Pollution and other environmental problems are resulting from a country's developing and becoming richer. Some think this can not be avoided. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Some people
belive
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in
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that
the
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environmental
pollutions
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pollution
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cannot be
stoped
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while
the
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developing
countries
attempting to get more
accsess
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access
to resources to improve their technology and reach
the
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more equivalences by improved
countries
. I agree with
this
theory to some extent as I will discuss it in my essay. One of the most important
pillar
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of the stated theory is
this
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fact that pollution in any region in the world can easily spread out and affect the global quality of environmental
condition
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conditions
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and
make even
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serious problems in many different aspects of our planet.
For instance
, if one country in the middle east
depleting
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the natural resources of oil to produce more electrical energy to use in their industrial or domestic parts, it
definitley
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definitely
lead
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to greenhouse gas
emmited
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emitted
which is a global impact and can reach
to
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other continent
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even in
polars
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polar
.
Therefor
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trying to improve in
this
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these
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countries
which
certaily acompanies
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certainly companies
with
this
kind
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kinds
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of activities, can
contineously
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continuously
generate worldwide
pollutions
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pollution
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.
On the other hand
, if
this
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countries
are
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take more responsible policies to develop their living level, and
using
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use
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sustainable and green methods to
enhancing
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their technologies can
effectivley
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effectively
reduce their environmental impacts resulting in
cleaner
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world. In conclusion, as I
disscused
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discussed
, using more sustainable technical methods and
commiting
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committing
commitment
to international environmental regulations can diminish the adverse impacts of industrial
developing
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development
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despit
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despite
of
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its nature to destroy and make
impurity
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in our habitat.
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