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You are planning to take a vacation. Writing a letter to a friend. In your letter: describe the vacation spot you have chosen explain how you plan to spend your time there invite your friend to join you on your vacation

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Dear Malik, Hello, I hope you are in sound health and doing well. I am writing
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 letter because I am planning to go somewhere to spend the holidays.
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, you know very well, mostly I like natural areas.
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, I have chosen one of my favorite places for vacation which is named Golden Gard. I want to see the most famous flower garden there. It
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 has a private beach and an attractive playground for children.
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 I
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 to buy a few new clothes from Fashion stores which
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 famous for shopping at night.
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, I want to buy original English books from bookstores. On top of that, we can enjoy fresh seafood at seaside restaurants. How about if you join me? It would be a wonderful opportunity to escape the busy life in the city for a few days and immerse ourselves in
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nature.
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, it will be a new challenge for both of us. Let me know if you are interested in
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 plan. Yours sincerely, Samandar

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To enhance task response, ensure all prompts are addressed thoroughly. Though your letter adequately discusses the destination, activities planned, and extends an invitation, offering more specific details about why the vacation spot is meaningful to you and how it fits your friend's interests would enrich your response.
coherence cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, maintaining a clear structure is key. Your letter is well-organized, but you can improve the flow by connecting ideas more smoothly between paragraphs. Try using transitional phrases like 'Moreover,' 'In addition,' or 'Furthermore' to link your ideas.
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Consider adding a more personalized closing to increase the warmth of your invitation, which would also improve the writing tone. For example, 'I can't think of anyone I'd rather have by my side during this adventure. Hope to hear from you soon.'
Topic Vocabulary:
  • breathtaking scenery
  • cultural landmarks
  • itinerary
  • accommodations
  • excursions
  • gastronomic delights
  • leisure activities
  • unwind and relax
  • off the beaten track
  • once-in-a-lifetime experience
  • picturesque
  • explore
  • local cuisine
  • adventure
  • bonding
  • create memories
  • companionship
  • escapade
  • serenity
  • revitalize
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