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The diagram below show how leather goods are produced.

The diagram below show how leather goods are produced.
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The image below shows us, how a
piece
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 of animal
skin
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 will be transformed into the
leather
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 good in a few steps.
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, there are more than ten
procces
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process
 about how to produce
leather
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 goods.
Firstly
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, we need the animal
skin
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, after
that
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that,
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the first step is
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 to dry the
skin
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 and
transported
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transport
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to
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it to
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 the
factory
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. Once we have the material we need to wash that in the water and lime mix.
Secondly
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, the next
procces
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process
 is
the
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soaking, the animal
skin
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 will stay in the lime, and after that
with
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a roll flattening machine will make the
piece
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 flat and
putting
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in the
mixed
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mix
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 of water and vegetable matter,
wich
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which
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 is called tannin
and
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will stay for soaking and just after that the future
piece
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 of
leather
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, it will be polished and ready to be transported to another
factory
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, where will be used to produce different products, like clothes, shoes and purses. In conclusion, to
transorm
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transform
 the animal
skin
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, into
the
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a
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piece
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 of
leather
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, we need the first
factory
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 where we produce
leather
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follow
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following
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few
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a few
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 steps, and another
factory
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 to produce different products with the
leather
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 we make
it
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apply
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words piece, skin, leather, factory with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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