The diagram below show how leather goods are produced.

The diagram below show how leather goods are produced.
The image below shows us, how a
piece
of animal
skin
will be transformed into the
leather
good in a few steps.
Overall
, there are more than ten
procces
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process
about how to produce
leather
goods.
Firstly
, we need the animal
skin
, after
that
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the first step is
to dry the
skin
and
transported
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to
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it to
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the
factory
. Once we have the material we need to wash that in the water and lime mix.
Secondly
, the next
procces
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process
is
the
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soaking, the animal
skin
will stay in the lime, and after that
with
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a roll flattening machine will make the
piece
flat and
putting
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in the
mixed
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of water and vegetable matter,
wich
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which
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is called tannin
and
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will stay for soaking and just after that the future
piece
of
leather
, it will be polished and ready to be transported to another
factory
, where will be used to produce different products, like clothes, shoes and purses. In conclusion, to
transorm
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transform
the animal
skin
, into
the
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a
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piece
of
leather
, we need the first
factory
where we produce
leather
follow
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few
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a few
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steps, and another
factory
to produce different products with the
leather
we make
it
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apply
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words piece, skin, leather, factory with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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