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You have just returned from a long holiday. While you were away, your friend looked after your house. Write a letter to you friend. In your letter - thank you friend for the things she/he did for you - offer to reimburse any money she/he spent on doing these things - arrange to meet your friend for a coffee late this week.

#holiday #friend #house #offer #money #coffee #week
Dear Abhi first of all, thank you so much for
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 at my my house
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 vacation.
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, you did a great job by watering the plants and
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 see you cut them a little so that
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 does look more beautiful.
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, you did
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 job on my dog by teaching him how to shake hands.
in addition
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, let me know how much for
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the
 repair of the fans and other electornis
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items
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 would love to pay you back.
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 will be free
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 weekend and
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 would love to meet you at our regular
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coffee
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your reply
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 faithfully Bharat Singla
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Tone and Engagement
Begin by addressing your friend with a warmer greeting. For instance, 'Dear Abhi, I hope this letter finds you well. I recently returned from my vacation...' This approach adds a more personal touch.
Content Development
Next, express your gratitude more elaborately. You could say something like, 'I cannot express how much I appreciate you taking care of my house. Your attention to the plants and your efforts with my dog went above and beyond.' This provides specific praise and shows deeper appreciation.
Clarification and Detail
For the paragraph discussing reimbursements, clarify your intention by writing, 'Please let me know the total expenses you incurred for the fan repairs and other electronic items. It’s important for me to reimburse you as you’ve generously helped out.' This makes your intention clear and polite.
Scheduling and Flexibility
Lastly, for arranging the meeting, ensure to suggest a specific time and maybe an alternative, like 'How about we meet at our favorite coffee shop this Saturday afternoon? If that doesn’t work for you, I’m also available Sunday.' This shows consideration for your friend’s schedule.
Grammar and Spelling
Throughout the letter, pay attention to spelling, grammar, and punctuation. For example, correct 'look at my my house' to 'looked after my house' and 'thr repair' to 'the repair'. Proper proofreading can greatly improve the clarity and professionalism of your letter.
Closing
Consider a more cordial closing, such as 'Looking forward to catching up. Warmly, Bharat Singla'. This makes the conclusion of your letter feel more personal and warm.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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