The graph below shows the average closing prices of selected precious metals from 2013 to 2021

The graph below shows the average closing prices of selected precious metals from 2013 to 2021
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The line chart demonstrates the information regarding the price of three different metals which were gold,
platinum
, and
palladium
every year, over
a
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eight-year
period
between 2013 and 2021. In general, the most prominent feature is that the cost of gold and
palladium
experienced upward tendencies
while
platinum
underwent the opposite throughout the
period
. Another interesting point is that, despite starting as the least popular,
platinum
was the least valuable metal in 2021. As regards gold, the price commenced at around 1500 in 2013 before decreasing slightly in 2015 to almost 1000. After that,
this
bakery witnessed another considerable increase to just over 1500
at
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2020 and remained stable until the end of
period
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the period
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.
Likewise
, despite being the least valuable metal in the first
period
at just above 500,
palladium
rose rapidly to under 1000 before it decreased
into
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around 500 in 2018.
However
, in the middle of
period
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palladium
rocketed by roughly almost 2500 and became the highest valuable metal in 2021.
On the other hand
, with respect to
platinum
,
its
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declined gradually
from
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the first three years, between 1500 to 1000.
Then
,
this
trend continued to hit the bottom at just under 1000 in 2020, before it inclined slightly to above 1000
in
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the end of year.
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