The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the US from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparions where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the US from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparions where relevant.
The line graph
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information about the proportion of domestic use with various
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of technology in
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between 1995 and 1999.
Overall
, all of the technological
adoption
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were upward trends during
this
period. Looking at the data in more detail, it can clearly be seen that the highest percentage was washing
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starting from 60
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and
this
figure
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increased
marginally to 80
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in 1999. The second increment was Computer machines rose
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at
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40
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to around 70
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.
Furthermore
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was
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inclined
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and reached
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almost 75
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, which is more than
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and
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second place.
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ahead, in
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of DVD player, in the first year the graph declined slightly from 25
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to 15
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then
soared significantly to a peak at 40
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during after
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period.
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, the percentage of the internet was marginal grew at the
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at 10
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to under 20
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then
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remained from the year 1996 to 1997 and climbed moderately to 50
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, which is more than DVD players.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adoption rates
  • technological proliferation
  • year-on-year growth
  • digital divide
  • saturation point
  • laggard technology
  • consumer electronics
  • technological obsolescence
  • internet penetration
  • market dynamics
  • socioeconomic factors
  • innovation trajectory
  • connectivity infrastructure
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