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Imagine that you are doing a project on learning English. You have found some data on the subject (see the diagram below).
Comment on the data in the diagram and give your opinion on the subject of the project. Why young people learn English

Imagine that you are doing a project on learning English. You have found some data on the subject (see the diagram below).
Comment on the data in the diagram and give your opinion on the subject of the project. Why young people learn English
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Nowadays it is impossible to imagine our life without learning foreign languages. I am doing a project on ,earning
English
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. I am going to analyse the results of the opinion poll in the diagram and give my opinion. Looking at the main features of the diagram, I must say that the most popular reasons for learning
English
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 are
need
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the need
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 to take an exam and
need
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the need
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English
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 for travelling (approximately 92% and 66%).
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contrary
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 the least favoured reason is
plan
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a plan
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 to work abroad in the future (10%).
According to
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 the data in the diagram, the number of
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apply
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respondents who want to talk to
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English - speaking
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English-speaking
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 people (33%)
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 13 times more than those who plan to enter a university abroad (20%). It is not surprising as most people want to use their
language
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 skills when communicating with native
English
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 speakers. One problem one can face when learning
English
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 is difficulty in pronunciation. A solution that can prove successful here is
regularly
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to regularly
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 practice pronunciation using online resources,
language
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 exchange apps or
language
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 classes to improve speaking skills and gain confidence. In conclusion, I believe that learning a foreign
language
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 is crucial as it fosters cultural understanding, enhances cognitive abilities and opens doors to diverse opportunities. It
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not only facilitates effective communication but
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 broadens one’s perspective, promoting personal and professional growth.
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