People’s lifestyles are becoming unhealthier in many countries. What can governments do to reverse this, and which of those actions is most likely to be successfully carried out by those governments?
In recent years, the throwaway lifestyle has become one of the most serious
health
problems among people
of all ages. This
is caused by several reasons including processed food consumption and lack of physical activities. In this
essay, I will discuss the reasons why people
in many countries live in unhealthy ways and suggest some solutions for the government in order to solve this
situation.
There is an irrefutable fact that unhealthy lifestyles happened
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happen
due to
some main reasons, including overworking. The increasing amount of work has led modern people
to numerous mental health
problems such
as exhaustion or burnout, and they tend to choose fast food for meals instead
of home-cooked meals. This
leads to long-term consequences as their diet contains a high proportion of fat and causes obesity. Furthermore
, lack of exercise is also
another problem which could destroy our health
. A study of some students at the University of Education showed that not only the
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adolescent
but Fix the agreement mistake
adolescents
also
older people
prefer staying at home and working with their computer
to exercising, even though Fix the agreement mistake
computers
having
seated in front of the screen too long without doing exercise causes several physical difficulties Verb problem
being
such
as short-sightedness.
According to
those problems, I would like to suggest that the government should expand the citizens’ knowledge about things they could do to have a better lifestyle, and also
pay attention to the effects which throwaway
lifestyle could Correct article usage
a throwaway
affect
mental Verb problem
have on
health
. Moreover
, governments should also
adjust the working hours for all businesses in order to balance between the work and life of all the employees. Once governments could
balance the working time, there will be more chances for Wrong verb form
can
people
to prepare for
their daily meals and do exercises regularly. Change preposition
apply
This
could be considered as the most important solution that governments should do immediately.
In conclusion, it is clear that
many people
are in disregard of their own way of living. Unhealthy lifestyles could be reduced if the government could popularize information about better ways of life and introduce new laws about working hours.Submitted by conghoanglan312 on
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task response
A more direct approach to answering the question will enhance the essay. Clarify how each suggested solution directly addresses issues of unhealthy lifestyles and make the connection between causes and solutions more explicit.
coherence cohesion
Incorporate a wider variety of cohesive devices and paragraphs structuring techniques to improve the flow of ideas. Ensure each paragraph clearly focuses on a single main idea with clear topic sentences.
task achievement
While the examples provided enhance the argument, integrating more specific statistical evidence or case studies could strengthen the support for your main points.
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