The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the US from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparions where relevant.

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The given line graph illustrates the percentage of households with different kinds of
technology
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over a period of four years between 1995 and 1999. There are five kinds of
technology
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reported which
is
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are
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washing
machine
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machines
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,
phone
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phones
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,internet,
computer
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computers
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and DVD
player
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players
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.
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it clearly
be
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seen that the washing machine was the most popular
technology
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at that time with the highest percentage for all the given periods, followed by
computer
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the computer
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in the second. The other three start with a lower level at the beginning period but show an increase until the end of the period. In terms of the
technology
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with the higher percentage, the washing machine stood at exactly 60% in 1995. In the following four years, the number increased slightly by precisely 20% and reached its peak at 80% in the final year.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words technology with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • adoption rates
  • technological proliferation
  • year-on-year growth
  • digital divide
  • saturation point
  • laggard technology
  • consumer electronics
  • technological obsolescence
  • internet penetration
  • market dynamics
  • socioeconomic factors
  • innovation trajectory
  • connectivity infrastructure
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