The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005 (in millions).

The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005 (in millions).
The table compares the
figures
for international travellers from various regions in four different
years
.
Overall
, the total
number
of people travelling internationally increased over the 15-year period. Only America had fluctuated
figures
,
while
the
figures
for other regions grew steadily over the
years
. The total
number
of international visitors increased by over 200
million
after 15
years
. Europe had the most numerous amount of travellers, which were 280.2
million
in 1990, and
this
number
rose to 400.2
million
in 2005. The
figures
for Asia Pacific started off at 60.2
million
,
then
grew gradually to 135.8
million
at the end
of the study period. Africa and
Middle
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the Middle
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East were the two regions that contributed the least to the total
number
of international travellers, which were just one-third and one-sixth of that in Asia Pacific, respectively.
However
, a constant growth was seen, as their
figures
almost doubled in 2005, compared to those in 1990.
In contrast
, the
figures
for America witnessed a slight fluctuation over the
years
. Specifically, the
number
of visitors stood at 80.5
million
in 1990,
then
slowly rose to peak at 118.2
million
in 2000.
Finally
, the figure
slight
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slightly
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shrank to 113.2
million
over
that
Correct determiner usage
the
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last
5
years
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words figures, years, number, million with synonyms.
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