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You should write at least 150 words. Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village.

You should write at least 150 words. Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village.
#chorleywood #village #london #population #middle #century #development
The picture illustrates
development
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the development
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 history
in
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of
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 Chorleywood
Village
 during the year of 1868 until 1994. Over a century, areas and
road
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roads
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 around Chorleywood Park and Golf Course were developed.
Majority
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The majority
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 of the change happened during 19701994 in the east of the
village
.
To begin
 with, there were three developments between 1868
-
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and
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1922.
Firstly
, an
area
 was developed in the west of the
village
 during 1868-1883.
Secondly
, another
area
, larger than the first one, was developed in 1883-1922 and was located around the southeast of the park and golf course.
Thirdly
,
railway
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the railway
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, crossing the southern
area
 of the
village
, was built in 1909
together with
 the Charleywood Station in the southeast
village
.
Furthermore
, another three changes
were happened
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happened
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 between 1922 and 1994.
Firstly
, some areas were built in the east and west of the train station around 1922-1970.
Secondly
,
motorway
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the motorway
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, crossing northwest to southwest, was developed in 1970.
Subsequently
, major
area
 developments around the motorway were finished in the year of 1994.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "firstly, secondly".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words village, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Steadily
  • Pivotal events
  • Significant change
  • Transportation links
  • Commuter village
  • Residential areas
  • Commercial areas
  • Public facilities
  • Infrastructure
  • Environmental impact
  • Community life
  • Conservation efforts
  • Maintaining character
  • Vicinity
  • Unique aspects
  • Common challenges
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