The graph compares the number of international students enrolled at Cathedral School, divided by their country of origin.
The graph illustrates the country of foreign students who are enrolled in Cathedral
School
. Overall
, the number of student
from South America decreased slightly between 1998 and 2001. Fix the agreement mistake
students
In contrast
, there are similarity
trend Replace the word
similar
of
students from South East Asia, Africa and Change preposition
for
Middle
East, and Europe that increased slightly in 2000.
On one hand, individuals from South America who Correct article usage
the Middle
enroll
to study in Cathedral Change the spelling
enrol
School
drop slowly between 1998 and 2001. In 1998, the
South Correct article usage
apply
American’s
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American
student
started at 15 Fix the agreement mistake
students
persons
. Afterwards, the Replace the word
people
people
who Correct quantifier usage
number of people
come
from South Wrong verb form
came
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America
American
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America
Wrong verb form
applied
apply
to get Wrong verb form
applied
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an education
education
in Correct article usage
an education
this
school
reduce
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reduced
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to
until
5 Change preposition
to
persons
in 1999. Replace the word
people
Moreover
, in the two years after that
the Add a comma
that,
individuals
from Correct quantifier usage
number of individuals
this
region decrease slightly at
around 7 Change preposition
to
persons
.
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people
On the other hand
, students from South
East Asia, Africa and Correct your spelling
Southeast
Middle
East, and Europe have Correct article usage
the Middle
similar
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a similar
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trends
trend
. In 1998, people from Africa and Fix the agreement mistake
trends
Middle
East who Correct article usage
the Middle
enroll
in Cathedral Wrong verb form
enrolled
School
started at 11 persons
and increase
slowly until almost 10 Wrong verb form
increased
persons
in 2001. Afterwards, the Replace the word
people
student
who came from South Asia Fix the agreement mistake
number of students
after decreasing
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decreased
until
10 Change preposition
to
persons
in 1999, they are increase
gradually Wrong verb form
increased
over
25 Change preposition
to over
persons
in 2001. In the last
, the number of Add an article
the individual
an individual
individual
who Change to a plural noun
individuals
are
come from Europe Unnecessary verb
apply
increase
slightly Wrong verb form
increased
until
almost 10 Change preposition
to
persons
before the graph Replace the word
people
drop
slightly Wrong verb form
dropped
around
5 Change preposition
to around
persons
in 2000.Replace the word
people
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