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The bar chart shows the monthly spending in dollars of a family in the USA on three items in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the monthly spending in dollars of a family in the USA on three items in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the
amount
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 of bucks an American family spent purchasing food, gas, and clothing in the year 2010 in the first four months of
this
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 year.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that the monthly
amount
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 of
money
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 has experienced a rollercoaster of changes during
this
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 period of time, which indicates that Americans spent most of their
money
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 on food in January and March,
however
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, clothing took the first spot in the other months. Starting off with January,
this
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 society tends to spend most of its outcome on food with almost 500 dollars in a month,
as well as
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 in March,
however
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, with a slight change.
On the other hand
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, in the months of February and April, the majority
amount
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 of dollars were used for buying clothes. As it is shown in the chart, almost 600 bucks were used for clothing. In the
last
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 month of
this
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 period,
however
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,
this
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 number significantly rose up by 700 dollars in a month, which was the highest number of all the data. The
amount
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 of
money
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 spent on gas,
furthermore
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, reached its highest number in April 2010 with slightly less than 600 bucks.
To sum up
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, the
amount
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 of
money
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 spent by Americans has experienced a fluctuation on average but had a growth in March.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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