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The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the seaside resort of templeton between 1990and2005 summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons were relavant.

The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the seaside resort of templeton between 1990and2005 summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons were relavant.
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The given maps depict the development that
have
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has
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 taken place at the seaside
resort
 of Templeton between 1990 and 2005
Overall
, the area had changed significantly during the time period ,with
introduction
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the introduction
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 of many new
facilities
 and
infarstructure
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infrastructure
 to change the
resort
 to
a
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an
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 urban area.
However
, the
west
 side of the
resort
 had
imporoved
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improved
 with more residential
facilities
 ,
while
 concentrating the other
facilities
 to the east of the
resort
. In detail, most of the
two story
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two-story
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 buildings
in
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on
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 the
West
 side of the area were abolished and replaced with many
skycrapes
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skyscrapers
, and
supermarket
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a supermarket
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 had built among the
buldings
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buildings
in
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on
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West
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the West
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 side of the
resort
. Other than that, most of the trees were
knoked
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knocked
 down in the
resort
 for the construction of new
facilities
.
Further more
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Furthermore
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, a new railway line
had
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was
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 built along the sea line from East to
West
, with
a
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the
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 introduction of a ferry at the South East corner of the
resort
.
In addition
 ,a factory was introduced to the
resort
 , North to the new railway line, and east to the river in the middle. The school and the hospital had
been remained
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remained
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 the same with
a
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the
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 construction of a new airport
North
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northwest of
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West
 to the school.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words resort, facilities, west with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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