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the given table illustrates the forecasted costing over the next five years in American dollar for three three environmental project for sustainable foresty and the pie chart depicts anticipated expenditure breakdown allocation for the first year. the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons were relavant.

the given table illustrates the forecasted costing over the next five years in American dollar for three three environmental project for sustainable foresty and the pie chart depicts anticipated expenditure breakdown allocation for the first year. the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons were relavant.
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The given table illustrates the forecasted
costing
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 over the next five years in American
dollar
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dollars
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 for three three environmental
project
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projects
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 for sustainable foresty and the pie chart depicts
anticipated
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the anticipated
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 expenditure breakdown allocation for the
first
year
.
Overall
, the projects cover 3 different areas across the globe with
maximum
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a maximum
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 estimated allocation for
the
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apply
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South-east
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Southeast
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 Asia ,and other than that, it is predicted to expend mostly on
workers
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workers'
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 salaries during the
first
year
 of the project. In detail, for the
South -east
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Southeast
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 Asian project ,it is estimated to allocate 30 million US
dollers
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dollars
 in the
first
year
 and it is predicted to reduce to 20 million in
next
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the next
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year
 and increased to 40 million in the 3 rd
year
 , and following that,
further
 increased in another 10
millions
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 in the 4th
year
 and to spend
same
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 amount in the
last
year
.
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, compared to
other
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the other
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 2 projects the
South -east
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Southeast
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 Asian one will be carried the most expenditure
through out
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throughout
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 the period.
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, in the planned
expendeture
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expenditure
 breakdown for the
first
year
 , 50 % of the money is allocated to
the
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apply
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salaries and
for
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the initial
set up
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set-up
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will be predicted to require 30%
from
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of
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 the allocated total.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words first, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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