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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given maps depict the 20
yrs
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years
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 ago and the contemporary floor plans of a public
library
.
Overall
, the
library
 has undergone significant changes in its layout and new facilities were introduced over the 20 yrs period
while
 abolishing some old facilities,
however
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however,
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 the total
bulding
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building
area
 has
been remained
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remained
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 unchanged. In detail,
entrance
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the entrance
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 of the
library
remain
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remains
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 unchanged ,and upon entering previous seating
area
 with tables and chairs has been removed to
creat
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create
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a
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an
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 open
area
at
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in
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 the middle of the
presentday
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modern
library
.
Furthermore
,
previous
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the previous
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 reading
room
 situated left to the
entrance
 has changed to a computer
room
 at present and
enquiry
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the enquiry
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 desk
opposit
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opposite
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 to it and right
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of
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the
entrance
 was replaced with a cafe. Other than that, the previous
room
 at the left far side of the
entrance
, for CDs, videos and computer games has changed significantly a to
kids
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kids'
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area
 with larger
room
 space and sofas for the
story telling
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storytelling
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 events ,and
further
 with children's
friction
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fiction
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 books.
Similarly
 ,
a
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apply
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self service
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self-service
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 machines can be seen with the
contrmporary
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contemporary
 plan just adjacent to the cafe at
right
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the right
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 to the
entrance
 .
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, area, entrance, room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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