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The table below shows the population (in millions)of 8 countries in 2008 and 2018 . It also shows the percentage growth in population between these two dates

The table below shows the population (in millions)of 8 countries in 2008 and 2018 . It also shows the percentage growth in population between these two dates
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The given table depicts the number of people across 8 countries in two different years, 2008 and 2018,
as well as
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 the
growth
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 rate between the two periods.
Overall
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, the comparison of 8 countries reveals that Angola had the greatest birth rate at 43%
while
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Romania
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 experienced negative
growth
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 at 5%. Looking in more detail, there were five countries that witnessed
population
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growth
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, the largest upturn was seen in Angola.
This
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 nation registered a 43% increase between 2008 and 208, from 21 to 30 million. The other African country in the sample, Nigeria,
also
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 ascended in
population
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,
although
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 not as huge as Angola's (28% compared to 43%).
In addition
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, Pakistan was ranked as the third greatest
growth
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 over the period at 21%.
Further
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, a rise in
population
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 can
also
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 be seen in Canada and Brazil which went up by 12% and 7% respectively. Standing at 0%, Russia was the only nation that remained the same in terms of the number of inhabitants for over 10 years.
In contrast
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, both
Romania
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 and Japan had a downturn trend in their
population
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 figures. The biggest decline was observed in
Romania
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 by 5% from 20 to 119 million. It should be noted that
Romania
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,
however
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, was the country with the smallest
population
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 in both years. As regards the remaining country, Japan, there was a modest fall (2%) in
population
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 rate from 128 to 126 million between 2008 and 2018.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words growth, romania, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic changes
  • standout statistics
  • magnitude of change
  • economic expansion
  • improved healthcare
  • aging population
  • emigration
  • regional patterns
  • anomalies
  • infrastructure
  • governance
  • global demographics
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