The charts below show the proportion of people’s total spending on different commodities and services in a particular European country in 1998 and 2008.
The provided bar chart
illustrate
the amount of individual spent on different products and services out of their total expense in a European country in 1998 and 2008. Change the verb form
illustrates
Overall
electronic goods and clothing remains
as highest spent categories and Change the verb form
remain
similarly
, buying newspaper
/ magazines and going to Fix the agreement mistake
newspapers
cinema
Correct article usage
the cinema
remains
as lowest sending in Correct subject-verb agreement
remain
both
years.
In 1998, people spent most on electronic goods at 16 and
followed by clothing at 12. Correct word choice
apply
However
, on
2008 these spending categories Change preposition
in
further
expanded by recording an amount of 20 for electronic goods and 18 for cloths. Amount
of spending Correct article usage
The amount
for
holidays decreased from 8 to 5 from 1998 to 2008 respectively. Eating out remained the same at 6 during Change preposition
on
both
years.
Both
1998 and 2008 seen
the lowest spent in two categories Newspaper / magazine and going to cinema. Change the form of the verb
saw
While
it remained lowest in both
years, spending had further
reduced from 3 in 1998 to 1 in 2008.Submitted by sajee_5 on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words both with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 4 times.
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