The charts below show the proportion of people’s total spending on different commodities and services in a particular European country in 1998 and 2008.

The charts below show the proportion of people’s total spending on different

commodities and services in a particular European country in 1998 and 2008.
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illustrate
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the amount of individual spent on different products and services out of their total expense in a European country in 1998 and 2008.
Overall
electronic goods and clothing
remains
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as highest spent categories and
similarly
, buying
newspaper
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newspapers
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/ magazines and going to
cinema
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the cinema
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remains
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as lowest sending in
both
years. In 1998, people spent most on electronic goods at 16
and
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apply
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followed by clothing at 12.
However
,
on
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2008 these spending categories
further
expanded by recording an amount of 20 for electronic goods and 18 for cloths.
Amount
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The amount
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of spending
for
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holidays decreased from 8 to 5 from 1998 to 2008 respectively. Eating out remained the same at 6 during
both
years.
Both
1998 and 2008
seen
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the lowest spent in two categories Newspaper / magazine and going to cinema.
While
it remained lowest in
both
years, spending had
further
reduced from 3 in 1998 to 1 in 2008.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words both with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 4 times.

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