There is increasing trend around the world of married couples deciding not to have children. Discuss the advantage and disadvantage for couples who decide to do this.

It has been seen, that the number of young married
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around the world has increased who decide to be childless. off course, it benefits them as they can be more focused towards their career and have more
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for themselves in
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, they cannot fit in peer groups who have
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and
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there will be no
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present to take care of them in their old age. The main benefit to
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have no
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is, that young
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can concentrate on their goals and careers. If their
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is consumed by
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care they cannot be dedicated to their work which takes them back from their work priorities.
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pregnant woman has to go on maternity leave in her pregnancy to recover herself. Sometimes if the situation is critical day off from work could be for a year, and it absolutely takes their job responsibilities behind
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expectations.
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, Husband-wife
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more
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to spend
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with each other if they do have not any responsibility for their offspring, they can flourish their relationship by travelling more which eventually makes them dedicated and responsible for each other.
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, the drawbacks of remaining childless cannot be ignored as they cannot see themselves as equal to their friends who have
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because they do not fit themselves in their company. Any kid's family prefer to spend
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with those only who have
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, there are a number of events that are only organised for families with
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who have no
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are ignored in those events. Apart from that, in old age , there will be no
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from their family who can support them if they don't have any child, Suppose, if the wife dies early
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will be left to take care
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downside should always
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before making decisions in
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. In conclusion,
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it is true that adult
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feel more loving and targetted for their career without having
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in their
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, but demerits of the decision make them alone in their mature
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friend circle does not support much to them.

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