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the diagram shows the stages involved in the process of making leather

the diagram shows the stages involved in the process of making leather
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The given
inforaphic
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infographic
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 illustrates details about how leather products are manufactured.
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, it can be seen that there are 11 steps involved in the process , commencing with drying animal
skins
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 and culminating with used goods ready for
distributing
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 to wholesalers for consumption. At the initial stage, the animal
skins
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 are dried under the Sun before being moved into
factory
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the factory
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.In
this
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 factory , there
are
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is
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 some chemical
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processes
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process
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processes
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 as these
skins
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 are washed in water
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combined
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combining
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combined
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 with lime ,and
then
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apply
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being
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soaked in lime.
Subsequently
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, the leathers are
flattend
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flattened
 by physical machines, prior to being soaked again in tannin. After that, these
skins
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 are polished by wheels.
Followed
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Following
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this
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 step is the delivering the leathers to
factory
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the factory
a factory
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 where they are used to produce a variety of completed products
such
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 as shoes, handbags and balls. The process terminates when these new commodities are willing to be sold in
market
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the market
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 to consumers

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words skins with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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